tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4679491230070359718.post8508666743563065398..comments2023-10-11T07:47:12.660-07:00Comments on allegro: NaPoWriMo #8Maya Ganesanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15981552119449526456noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4679491230070359718.post-943611657234855612010-04-09T13:26:08.223-07:002010-04-09T13:26:08.223-07:00@Georgie: I feel like the story isn't complete...@Georgie: I feel like the story isn't complete, like there's more to tell but I'm just restraining myself. It was written in a hurry, and there definitely are some lines I would like to pull...it needs some work for sure.<br /><br />@Jessie: Yeah, I was thinking about that. It's a really loose draft, so after April when I get cracking on the revision there will be some pretty major changes to this piece if I decide to revise it at all - I think I might take a few of the good lines in this and use them elsewhere. Thanks for your constructive criticism, though!Maya Ganesanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15981552119449526456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4679491230070359718.post-10381072982156357112010-04-09T12:36:35.269-07:002010-04-09T12:36:35.269-07:00i'd like to see a little more description. may...i'd like to see a little more description. maybe of the farm house or the way the guitar felt...hmmJessie Cartyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13181286764480973423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4679491230070359718.post-38154967743004389102010-04-08T22:59:20.301-07:002010-04-08T22:59:20.301-07:00What do you plan to revise? It looks good to me. :...What do you plan to revise? It looks good to me. :) <3Sarah Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11525949118660493801noreply@blogger.com