April 04, 2009

NaPoWriMo #4

Cityscape

Under the perfect sky the gray-blue ocean
*gone*

7 comments:

Cuileann said...

Oh! I really enjoy the story about you blending the colors. The end is great.

And it's always nice to see something familiar through someone else's eyes.

Erin said...

I really love, "the gray-blue ocean swings"

Q said...

"sticj thin trees stretched like fireworks"

I approve of this line. :D

Cassandra said...

This is wonderful. :D

Q said...

And I'm sorry I can't spell.

Andromeda Jazmon said...

Wow I love your poems! Thanks for leaving a comment at my blog. I put you in the round up.

I love how you contrast the ocean's in and out with the traffic, and then the motion of your fingers working on the canvas then still in your pocket. Nice progression!

Beth Kephart said...

There is so much movement here.